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　陈传光 男，32岁，中学一级教师，任教于江苏省赣榆县罗阳中学，从事教育教学工作9年。江苏省教育学会会员，连云港市优秀教育园丁，赣榆县优秀班主任。有多篇论文在各类期刊上发表并获奖，曾获全国中学生新课程英语语言能力竞赛优秀辅导教师一等奖。
 　　as time goes by， humans are making the earth sick. people cut down too much trees① and leave more and more rubbish here and there. factories let out their waste without doing anything to it. all this has caused many serious problems. more and more good farmland has turned into desert， the rivers and lakes have polluted② and the water in them is dirty and poisonous. the air is less clean， even the temperature of the earth is higher than before. the earth is sick now. what should we do to save her？
 　　first， we should stop people from pouring waste directly into the air or rivers.
 　　second， planting more trees and grass is a good idea. it can stop the wind from blowing the earth away. what’s more， forests can make the air clean and fresh.
 　　we have only one earth. we should do useful something③ to protect it. it is our home. protecting the earth is our duty.[论文网]
 　　（江苏省赣榆县罗阳中学九（1）班 孟琦）
　　1. 优点
　　本文小作者以“拯救地球”为话题，从破坏植被引起土地沙漠化、倾倒垃圾污染环境等方面阐述了人类对地球的伤害，说明了保护地球、保护环境的重要性以及如何保护地球、保护环境的措施，行文流畅，通俗易懂，是一篇不错的习作。
 　　2. 需要修改的地方
　　① too much改为too many。too much修饰不可数名词，too many修饰复数可数名词。
　　② have polluted改为have been polluted。结合上文，此处应使用现在完成时的被动语态。
　　③ useful something改为something useful。形容词修饰不定代词，应放在不定代词后面。
　　3. 评分
　　按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分20分的评分标准，本文修改前可得17分。